So down there is my free choice writing.It is a tall tale.It has lots of my friends and crazy animals in it.This had to be our best piece of writing because it is going in our reports for writing.I think this is my best.It is called future zoo.It takes a while to get marked because there is 77 other kids in the hub.
Hopefully it will be good enough for my report.
I hope you enjoy it and also comment.
Free Choice Writing by Cameron
Persuade, Entertain or Inform?
I am learning to communicate my ideas effectively to the reader.
Success Criteria (Sentence formation has been our main focus)
Content & Ideas
Include a range of ideas with clear details.
Choose words and language features to meet my purpose.
Clear beginning, middle and end with paragraphs.
My best spelling with good attempts at words I don’t know.
Use all basic punctuation (capital letters, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks) correctly and attempt some complex punctuation.
The future zoo
Ring! Ring! “Bro come to the zoo for my birthday and make sure you bring a presant and were shorts ok Cam”.”Got it”.”Mum mum can I go to Amos’s birthday party at the zoo?”.”Sure Cameron”.”But first we need to get him a present”.We got him the new real madrid football suite.
Vroom vroom we hoped in the car and started the engine.”Lets go” I say. Finally we arrived. We hopped out of the car and we paid to go in.
Mum and I just walked around and tried to find Amos. About 2 minutes later then we found him and he was with Oscar, Brayden and Rory. So I said “happy birthday mate”.Any way we had a look around and came across a dabasouruas. It was a dinosaur that dabed. I enjoyed looking at all the weird things, we even saw a zombie and unicorn joined to make a zombicorn. It wasn't like any old zoo with tigers. There tigers had a shark head with an elephant body.Some of the things were crazy but frightening. My favorite thing was probably the octopus goat.
He opened his presents and he got a real madrid football suite, a football, a bag of lollies with $50 bucks, and a ipad.
“Amos did you like your presents?” said his mum.”Yes” he replied. “although the bag of lollies could have been massive”.”But I still love my prezzies, thanks guys”. “Its ok bro”.After the prezzies we had a massive ice cream cake.”Thanks for the cake” I said. “Sweet as” said Amos’s dad. Out of nowhere our parents come to pick us up.”How was it said mum.”Fun we all replied”.
“See you later guys”I say.”Bye” they replied.
By Cameron Browning.