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Mystery object

In my hand is a small heavy object. It is very sparkly like a diamond. It has sharp pointy bits at the back.You can wear it in your hair like a headband.

There are a few holes in it, with diamonds on the sides. It smells like metal. You can wear it to a ball/dance. Princesses,girls and boys can wear them but boys, trust me don’t. Now can you guess what it is.

I am proud of this because… It was fun making the writing and I enjoyed it. I think it is a good detailed piece of writing. I went to a workshop and learnt how to choose the best vocabulary and I improved it.

My biggest challenge was...Adding detail because It was only a small object. But after a workshop I could improve it.

Leave in the comments what you think it is.

Mounting Biking

Here is my my recount. Hope you enjoy it.

My Recount

Success Criteria

• Title: Relates to events / experiences being retold
• Orientation or Introduction: Provides information about who, when, where and why,
• Events - in order of time - in paragraphs with supporting details
• Personal Comment: sums up the events / experiences
• Past tense - with time words e.g. by now, during, then, after that and past tense verbs e.g. climbed, found, leapt, clambered, was
• Choosing the best words as you can
• Your best punctuation and spelling
• My goal:Use a topic sentence to start a paragraph.

Make sure you choose an event or experience you remember well!

MY RECOUNT

Mounting Biking

Year:2015

Sup Hunt’s. See you later guys. Grabbing my bike I was wheeling it to the truck. Hey Cam Shane said how are you,I’m good,that's good he replied. Come on then let’s go. Off we went first we went back to Hunters to grab some more stuff for the tent and picked up Sarah. While they got ready me and Hunt’s played some footy.

Ready boys yip,let's hit the road we had a stop at the petrol station and bought some gum and a pie each I , got a steak and cheese pie and Hunter got a butter chicken pie. Finally we got there. But we still had to find the holiday  park. After we found it we made it to our spot. Then we unloaded the car and put up the tent. Well we were putting the tent up there were lots of wasps which made it harder and they were all in the tent until we sprayed some stuff in the tent. So we set up our bed.

Later on  me and Hunt’s went for a walk. After about 5 minutes of walking we found the pool. Straight away we ran back to the tent and got into our togs,grabbed our towels and went for a swim. At one of the ends it was really deep and over our heads but at the other end it was up to our chests. The pools were heated and there was a spa pool. 1 hour later we hopped out and went back to the tent for tea.

The next day we went mountain biking. We went on the track to huka falls and back. We started the track. Half an hour into the bike it was really hot because in some spots we were biking on the edge of the cliff in the sun. But there was some shade by the jumps. At one stage we were able to see huka falls. Hay Hunter

I said we are nearly there yay he replied. Last  minute Sarah said. Down the last straight we arrived there. I had already been to Huka Falls but we had look and took some pictures.Then we had a ice block. I had a Choc Bar and hunter had a Mango Frugu. On the way home Hunter fell off his bike and hurt his hand. It took about 4 hours to get back and 4 hours to get to Huka Falls. Yay we said we're back. Altogether we biked around about 14-16 km.

The next morning it was estar and we got a chocolate bunny and 3 easter eggs each. Come on guys lets go and we went home after packing everything up. It was raining and we fell asleep most of the ride.

Hopefully I can go mountain biking again it was an adventure.

By Cameron

Glenn B AKA My Dad

This is my piece of writing.It is a character piece which is were we describe someone really well.We had to describe someone wen knew.So I chose my dad. I really enjoyed learning a new type of writing.

WALT choose words that give the reader a vivid picture in their head

Glenn B AKA My Dad

Purpose: To Entertain

Text Type: Character Description

My Writing Goal:

Success Criteria:

• Shows physical description
• Shows character traits and actions
• Organised into correct sentences and paragraphs
• Strong nouns, verbs and adjectives
• Uses a good simile and can use other language features effectively
• Has an entertaining anecdote (little story that happened) about the character
• Use a topic sentence to start a paragraph

Glenn B AKA My Dad

My dad is a casual dude who enjoys watching sport on tv and playing sport also he like’s Holdens. He is also a chilled back kind of dude and likes relaxing every once a while.

He has short curly hair and a small beard. He enjoys wearing the old jeans and work boots to work. I wouldn't call him a giant of a man  but he sure is a man. .Did you know that when he was at high school he set a record for the fastest 100 meter sprinter and in the final my dad was the fastest junior against the fastest senior and he one. He also likes drinking beer and coffee while relaxing on the porch in the sun.

My dad is a lot of things but here are some of them. He is a sporty guy and when it comes to family sports he sure is supportive. He is also a person who has time for family and enjoys spending time with them. That's what my dad is to me and my family.

By Cameron B

Cross country moment in time

                                                                 Cross Country


 My heart was beating as we got called over. I looked around people cheering us on. Lining up, butterflies racing round in my tummy. GO! Off we went zooming down the first straight. Round the first few corners. Still the butterflies racing in my tummy. Finally we got to the last lap. I still was running really well as I got to the hurdles - jump jump jump! I went up to the final straight sprinting my hardest the whole way. Finally I past the line. I came 8th and I was happy about it.

The Island

I am blogging this because I enjoyed the story and I liked writing it. I was learning new words and to fix my own mistakes.



                                                        The Island 
Bang!I hoped out of the helicopter. I was stuck on a stranded Island.My helicopter had crashed. For a while I thought to my self.I had an idea I would walk for a  little bit and see what I could find.Longer and longer I walked.

Suddenly I came across a bunch off people camping by the sea in a tent.I asked them if they spoke English.It was silent for a little bit but they didn't. They walked off for a swim in the sea.Then the tent I remembered so I went inside and stole some supplies like,food,clothes and bed ware.

I got back to my helicopter made a shelter and and went to sleep.The next morning half of my stuff was gone but any way my helicopter was fixed and good to go so I could go home.And I did THE END!

 

Emotive Writing

This is my writing.It is emotive writing.Emotive means your feelings.We had to listen to music then write down ideas.Then we had to put the ideas into a story.Also we had to write about what it reminded us of.





                                   Emotive Writing

I carefully opened the door a crack.  Chills rushed down my body as the music started to play. Footsteps coming from the kitchen.Blood oozed down the walls I closed my eyes.I was terrified, petrified but I had made it to my bedroom. Finally I was so happy I could go back to sleep.    

THE EXPERIENCE

The music reminded me of a funeral,horror movie/monsters, opera, nights fighting for freedom, the army and the end of a race in a movie.It was a little sad but not really.It was about 4 minutes long.                       

Writing

MY SPECIAL PLACE

Here is my writing.

V room V room goes the car and off we go. I see it. I see it. The sign to the Sports Park. Spontaneously I light up.

I open the door.I sniff… all I smell is the mucked up grass.

We start off with a jog. After a while all I can feel is sweat dripping from my face.

Slowly down my body but I keep going.

I grab out my Powerade and have a big sip of it."Its nice I say to Dad" "yeah it is aye" Dad goes.

About an hour later dad said "time to go Cam" "oh really Dad 10 more minutes please" "no its tea time" "OK see you tomorrow

park bye". Off we went.